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My Story (keep your tail off!)

Another productive day on 2 of 3 gigs, but it's time to get back to the freelance writing. Almost done with MK edits, just in time for the trip to Boston/Boskone this weekend. So, somewhere around an A minus today because I let the girls out on time and drafted a client's return, too.

But what's interesting (only to me) are the MK edits and what's happening. It's weird, because it's Blossom's story, not his, but I still think a lot about the Mouse King himself.

So here are various photos of no interest to anyone in particular, but I wanted to commemorate some part of this process:

I should warn folks that read the first finished draft that this is called the "stripped" version. Based on GF's critique, I've taken out a lot of worldbuilding that wasn't essential to the story...the story as it finally unfolded, not necessarily as I originally tried to write it. The first finished draft led the reader astray in terms of "whose story is this?" So I took out anything not directly related to the main story...and a lot of those edits happened before I printed out this draft. This work is looking at what's left and thinking about what's really going on, what's intended, what's accidental, what was Blossom's gift really about, what were the movtivations, what did Cumin really want and what does the MK really want. And looking at parallels to Helen and Iphegenia and what those mean to me.

Front Page with Major Comments to Myself


I had a lot to say here. I wonder what it was?


I shred most of these drafts later. That way I can recycle the shreds.


It's all very Swanwickian.


I like duplex printing. It takes getting used to, but it's kinder to trees to print on both sides in a draft.


Arrows do not mean forward progress in the story. It's more of a logical notation to myself of intent.


Hey, I've got 40 pages of this stuff by printing it out with such big margins. If you write a comment I don't like, I'll post photos of each and every one and start telling you my margin notes in all their gory detail.


I took a photo of this page because I made a lot of cuts.


Unfortunately, there are still some pages that look like this and no, it doesn't mean that they're so perfectly written that I have no changes...I haven't finished the process yet, but I'm getting there.


Last page...yes I have some thoughts here on how things should get wrapped up.

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jehanni
Feb. 13th, 2008 12:43 pm (UTC)
You shred your drafts?! But how are future historians going to disgorge doctoral dissertations on your writing process if you don't leave them manuscripts to pore over! They'll be stuck scanning through LJ's archives, searching your journal posts for clues, and who knows what your library will have as assets...perhaps a few measely holos, and a quaint mpeg from one of your "soundtrack" discs. Unless you think they'll have perfected time travel, and "evidence" will be temporal.

--signed, the hoarder-- ;-)
birdhousefrog
Feb. 13th, 2008 02:13 pm (UTC)
I want everyone to think the story sprang full-formed from my thigh, of course.
mindseas
Feb. 13th, 2008 01:20 pm (UTC)
Are you going through NJ on your way to or from Boston? You could stop by and visit me.
birdhousefrog
Feb. 13th, 2008 02:15 pm (UTC)
this short a trip and at this time of year, I'm flying. I tend to drive through PA and NY to Boston, up 81 and 84. But when we go to RI, we go 81 to 78 to 287 to 95, which might be closer to where you are. We're so far west we rarely take 95 up the coast...too much traffic, for one thing.
kelly_yoyo
Feb. 13th, 2008 05:25 pm (UTC)
Interesting! Thanks for posting the photos. I'm going to try this wide margin thing myself.
birdhousefrog
Feb. 13th, 2008 07:31 pm (UTC)
I got the idea because Greg has often pushed me to try "cluster-writing" when I'm stuck...that is, you find a spot that piques something and you begin writing out from there instead of moving in a linear way. I adapted that to this draft. Looking at it in a linear way, screen by screen, was not generating the serious change Greg called for in his critique.

So I got the idea of printing it with huge margins to allow me to free-associate and edit, to write down things like "she thinks he's one of the fairies pretending to be a mouse as a joke" and "rivers are highest in early spring, in snow melt in this sort of climate...you need to figure out how they get across" and "I think it works for tension if a reader believes early on that she's in danger from the MK" and "she can't help but make him into a hero, answer his most secret desire." And then there are the actual edits as well, places I think could go, move somewhere else, word choices. And then some things I write to myself about my influences, where I might add dialog, notes on whether she's going to take charge of her own destiny.

For shorts, I think it works. I don't know if it will work for a novel, but I might find out. I'm going to be looking at my novel again in a few weeks when I go to horse camp again.

Oz
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