Did the fast edit to the Mouse King yesterday, adding dialog instead of narration in selected places, tightening up what I let the reader know, deleting a few things that didn't work for the readers, just confused them in terms of where I wanted them to focus. Sent it off to a new reader for an opinion. Been saving this reader in my back pocket, I have. And now I need his/her/its opinion, with all his/her/its fairy lore brought to focus.
Frog Out